nelzealoursmotoe1
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I like the way you’ve called p as in this expression “Let’s drop the weight we call pain”.
Lovely poem!

What a lovely acrostic

I like such rare expressions as this “ Bleed as ink through fissured cracks.”

I like how this phrase is explained “You wear them like a work of art”.

James 2:6

“I went inside to meet the rich the successfulones they say
They have more problems than the homelesswho can’t afford to pay“ i like this piece and the whole poem at large.

“ You were my what-if, my almost,
A story written in the stars but never told.
I loved you with a passion that wasn’t returned,
A devotion that never found its home.
Yet, even as I let go, your absence stings,
A love that never was, but will forever be.” almost every person’s experience when there’s that beautiful or handsome person they failed to approach but still felt for.
A lovely piece girl! more »

A right way to apologies
This is spot on!

“Survival will stand when the law tries to run.“
This explains something crucial
The law of nowadays is corrupt hence, survival can only be earned when the law hides itself .

That’s how depression invades a person’s mind
Lovely piece!

If poetry were a person “ Oh, seeker, come and make me seen,
Discover me, end this lonely dream,
In shadows here, I wait unseen,
Does poetry still hold its sheen?” this stanza makes sense.

A Captivating piece of writing this is!

“ Blue is rain, a gentle tear,
Blue is laughter, banishing fear.
It cradles joy and buries deep
The silent ache where sorrows sleep”

This part shines on this poem

“A masterpiece in motion, never truly complete.” This resonates well with the title. What a well written piece!

*The horizon’s crimson like crying blood,
Should not be far,
Graceful butterflies there*

This line sparkles